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We were standing on the corner
Just person you and person me.
Sinking deep into your eyes
I said “I love you.”

You smiled and blinked and shifted,
Looking down and to the left.
As the world ground to a hush
You said “You’ve touched me.”

The many moons, of wax and wane,
The seasons borne, the days forgone,
Through them, conditionally,
You became my life.

But within that norm and from your lips
Shot daggers, ever cleaving,
Words like “Jealous,” “Bore” and “Stifling.”
Ripped my soul.

A harvest moon, in passing,
Gave you lift unto another.
My life stopped -- remains stopped
Until this day.

With the vilest words regressing,
Their vitriol slowly ebbing;
There’s just one thing in my life
I’ll not transcend.
  
On my last day – I'll remember
The three words which were not spoken
On a corner
On that one particular day.



Things Unsaid
© 2007     Mark Pearce


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Author's Comments

Obviously this is a portrait of an asymmetrical relationship. We’ve all probably faced them at some point in our lives. They’re never very healthy, but when we’re in love we do stupid, stupid things.

This probably needs to be extended for full effect, but I'm always anxious to post for my watchers.

I did a fairly extensive re-write on the piece after its posting. It's more poetic now.

Thanks for your attention and feedback.

Save the world, please.

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:icontrishvandenberg:
amazing:)

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“Love is just Love", it can never be explained.
:iconnarabedla:
The Thud indeed. Fantastic effect.

--
You must make of the impossible
a minimal and ludicrous possibility.
:iconw-uno:
Interesting. I was thinking of something much like this early.

There's something about the fourth stanza I'm not a fan of. Can't put my finger on it. Other than that, it's a sweet piece with a nice cyclic feeling.

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Go then - there are other worlds than these.
:icontoonrama:
:):):) Just so nice

--
Set a bird's wings with gold and it will never again soar in the sky.
- Tagore.
:iconkholdmalik:
Nice work! :)

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"A força pode ganhar a luta, mas é o estilo que ganha a multidão."
:iconmarzguy:
I've already revised it a bit since posting and there are still some touch ups to do. Yeah. I think it's not quite there yet.

Thanks for giving me the feedback.

--
I wrote a little boat
Into existence
It floated down the stream
At my insistence.
:iconmarzguy:
Thanks, 400.

And for the fave too.

--
I wrote a little boat
Into existence
It floated down the stream
At my insistence.
:iconmarzguy:
Rama –

Nice?

Nice?????

Why blast me with such a benign epitaph when kicking my in the groin would have been so much more direct and honest.

“Tragic” maybe.

;Pathos” perhaps.

But nice?

Oh Rama, you cut me to the quick.


Mark Pearce

P.S. Thanks for faving it.

--
I wrote a little boat
Into existence
It floated down the stream
At my insistence.
:iconmarzguy:
And I am joking with you a bit here.

The garbled line should have read --

Pathos, perhaps. (with quotation marks. A quotation mark before a p seems to set off a weird technical error.)

--
I wrote a little boat
Into existence
It floated down the stream
At my insistence.

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